She: I used to believe you.
He: I know.
She: I used to hold onto every word you said.
He: Yeah, well…
She: I thought we'd be together until the world crumbled around us.
He: Only on paper. No, not even on paper.
She: Your reality isn't real. I can't feel it; I can't touch it. It's not real!
He: This is my reality.
She: Does the end scare you?
He: No and yes.
She: What do you mean?
He: No, coz I imagine it to be like sleeping on a cold night.
She: And yes?
He: I wouldn’t be able to get up!
He: I’d let you die in my thoughts forever…
30 people read and said:
sexy........
touchin man....
"I cant let u die in my thoughts forever"....vl b more effectiv
Brilliant again.. Bravo.. :)
Freaky
i liked whatever i read.
But sadly,i didn't understand it.
Somehow I knew it was death not a heart break / divorce that the story was reaching towards. That is because I expected the twist from you.
Again smooth and crisp, like one of the stories from 'New York I love you', remember the one with the married couple out on a date after a real long time?
I agree with Prakhar, what he suggested seemed to take it beyond death. Also, only on paper (reference to marraige?)killed the eternity value. It could have been,' only in wishes/promises', or better 'if only the world was crumbling for both of us (not just me)....' OR 'I'll wait so we can be together/ i'll still be around' (this one sounds cheesy actually)
Hey, but have you tried copy writing for ads, short film script writing/ direction...how about approaching shamiana film festival with your scripts, or better have your own stuff with this on youtube? Just a passing thouhgt...
and btw, I'd love to act in them or lend my voice
i felt wierd
Why do guy always have to behave in such a complicated manner!!! :(
@Prakhar - Thanks!
May be you are right, it could have been, but it wouldn't have had the same effect. Keep coming around buddy! :)
@Bedlam - It's always so good to see you. Thanks! How have you been? :)
@Phoenixritu - Says enough?
@Meher - Thanks. They lost each other, that is it! Read again, you will understand :)
@Malvika - You don't even know, but I actually wait for your comments! Yes, it was not a heartbreak, but it was not death, literally too. Yeah, you have read so much here, you may even find the twists normal too! :p
Yes, I've seen and loved that movie! Am sure you've seen 'P.S. I Love You'?
As I already replied to Prakhar, you know sometimes all we want is an end; even though we may not have in real sense! Paper was used only metaphorically here, has no connection with marriage .. crumbled paper is what their love has become now! You misread the meaning, it is not about togetherness in reality!
Haha! I am a management graduate, don't even have any clue about script writing/direction. Wow! This does give me some ideas, if you really think it can work .. get in touch with me, I'd really like to work on the youtube idea and than see where it goes. You are really nice, now I'd hunt you down! :D Seriously, thank you Malvika! :)
@Loving the moment - Weird, it was!
@Being alive - It's not guys Divya, it's the situations :|
okay mama, i dont visit your blog hence i do not comment. Well written..now that i've read it, i didnt understand. :|
Note to self: dont visit again :P
ok baiiiii!
-gappoo.
yip. just about as simply confusing as every relationship I have ever had :) haha.
@Sorav ya dude i vll b around....
nd i must apraise Malvika for her ideas..
especialy d idea of script writting u should atleast think at that direction.....
On your blog after a long time ...been catching up on all the posts...as for this one...I felt it seemed to speak of more of a relationship that could have been not an actual one...my take I guess....You say a lot in few words and leave it to the audience to interpret the way they think to... :)
Hmm...Few simple words expressing an intense relationship...wen i read d word cold i knew how d post wud end...its definitely presence of love even in eternity...
(as i did mention earlier ur writings makes its reader 2 leave a reply n not just reading n pressing next blog...but leaving a reply on dis post took a long time...wanted 2 grasp d emotions n depth of it :)...
@Anonymous/Shruti/gappu/etc/etc - Since your M.Sc you have lost your magical wand (chasma)..and I am not surprised with your wella-panti! :p
Note banao, lekin apne school ke! ;)
Fir aana haan! :p
@Kay - Confusion and relations compliment each other so well! :)
@Songnwords - yes, what about the long absence? Well, you are almost there! I don't do anything intentionally .. but yes if you think, I'd still take that as one compliment! Thanks :)
@Beyond Horizon - Cold! Yes, the word expresses a lot! But I have always believed more love in coldness thn warmth!
Well, yeah you told me this! And what's better thn getting a comment from someone who tries to understand before reading it. Thank you Poonam :)
@Prakhar - Thanks mate! :)
Well, I appreciate that too, but time-constraints, resources (brain) to think constructively in that direction .. I guess I fall short! ;)
But yes, lets see and hope if I could actually do something like that .. you be a constant critic, it helps me! :)
Thank ya buddy.. Doin well.. How are you??
Ahhhh...to b back and read something as touching as this is simply superb!!!
Sourav....way to go, man!!!
Hey! Wow, I didn't know that. I have been active in reading around blogosphere and yeah posting my take for those who dropped by at my blog, haven't got many replies yet, so i guess you are one of the few who appreciate details!
No I haven't read 'Atlas Shrugged, and not seen P.S.
Ok, I get the paper bit.
And yeah you don't need to be even literate to be an artist! I'm sure you know that.
Sometimes... Education ruins you...either it lacks no perception, or worse it encourages only some body else's (Something engineering did to me) I am glad good at, are things I didn't learn in a school.
So, go ahead!
Well written dear ;)
bit Complicated :)
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@Bedlam - I am good too, get back to blogging soon :)
@Jaunty - Arey Rhythm! You are here after years? :p
Thanks a lot! :)
@Malvika - When some people read and leave sensible comments, they are usually the readers every blogger wants to see back! :)
Fine, you should read it and see the movie too.
Agreed, we are born with few things. Education may curb that but it cannot get that out of us! Well, read your blog the other day, you write well! :)
Thanks, be around.
@Moonshine - Thanks Shreya! Well, yeah it was to me too! :)
You came here to tell me that? :p
and I was thinkin that a divorce is being discussed by two sane people.
Nice write.
But it was a shock that you didnt participate in Blogeshwar.
Giving others a chance eh?
gud...
"I’d let you die in my thoughts forever…"
can't understand this part Sourav :(
Could you explain it to me :)
I am fine this way.. You enjoy this world of yours.. I will just watch from here.. Thanks for the invite though.. :)
All I could sing along it was this
She once believed...in every story he had to tell...
One day she stiffened...took the other side...
Empty stares...from each corner of a shared prison cell...
One just escapes...one's left inside the well...
And he who forgets...will be destined to remember...
Nothingman.
Nice read.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
Whoa ! Nice :D
y the end had to be so complicated!!
Compelling a tear in she :)
And he has said so much..
Neva been so better.. ;)
Your comments make me smile.. Thanks for considering.. :)
How do you do, boy?
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