Ephemeral aspirations unite us
Eternally bonded inseparable.
As we are conjoined, and
Shall live beyond
The ages of Earths to come,
We will search allusion
Beyond the blackened abyss
Until discovering one another
Again, each and every time.
Our flames ignite
Only when together in place;
Envy consumes them,
As eyes glisten with blaze.
To be flint, I yearn for your tinder.
I have yet not to find you.
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awwwwwwww that's so cute (^o^)
ishhh.. maar daalaaa ree.. kyaa kaatil poem likh di yaarr....
//To be flint, I yearn for your tinder.
I have yet not to find you.//
i found you sweetheart <3 <3 <3
Awww... this is really really sweet :).
Hmm, so you just went back to Oxford (unlike you do usually) and took us all in there as well!
Ephermal and eternal together, to begin consecutive lines was heavy, did not enjoy.
It is personal so I can't comment here...'conjoin' always makes me think of either conjoined twins and worry, or worse, mathematics and twitch!
Rest is where the poetry takes shape, till the envy part where I suddenly imagined an old hindi movie stepmom entering the scence.
The last two lines are wow, how to say... its like smell the blossom and breeze and wish for someone and sigh! Instantly remembered the song 'My dil goes Hmm'... too beautiful for a guy to write.
Am i being a thorough critique?
thats a very sweet write :)
well written
ahh haa ... so finally comes a poem ... great job done ... :)
I am speechless :)
@Chocolate Lover - awwww? okay! Thanks!
@Meg - Maar diya?
Ohhhhhhhh! ;)
@Harinin - Awwww? you too! :o Thanks! :)
@Malvika - Okay! Honestly there were some high decibel words, but no Oxford connections! :p
Ephermal and eterenal somehow complimented to each others context in my head. About conjoin, it is not about twins or twitch, more of a beyond death connection!
Haha! And I had no clue about all that!
Okay, I am going to take that as a compliment, even though you framed it otherwise, but guys can write good things, even though just sometimes!
Yes, thoroughly! And am liking that too! :) Thanks.
@Rajlakshmi - Thanks! :)
@Kshitija - I was never prepared to post this, but did coz of someone. Glad you liked it!
@Rashmi - That was the purpose! :)
Where did this kinda vocab come from :)
Lovely writing Sourav :)
keep em comin
cheers !!
ahem...ahem...love is really complicated....ur words expresses that ;)..anyways but words frm heart bcoz of sum1 beloved r really touching...honestly i read it 5 times(first reaction was WOH!....i gone thru it again n loved it each time i read :)...then I turned 2 d pics beside...n reflected all d emotions in ur words!!!
:)
I did not understand your poem...
specially.....
Our flames ignite
Only when together in place
What happens to their fire when eternaly bounded souls get separated......
@Sathish - Brother, I don't really use such words, but at times they just flow and you know that! :)
Thanks for being around, always!
@BH (Poonam) - :P More thn my words, it's people's personal love experiences that makes them understand better! ;)
5 times!!! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! Don't really have much more to say, and repeating that your comments actually make me smile! :)
@Sony - Tell me how can ETERNALLY bonded souls get separated? No, they don't ... but if they do, it was not eternal. Hope this helps! And sorry, if am not wrong you have read my posts before too?
Nop doesnt help
Beyond the blackened abyss
Until discovering one another
Again, each and every time
That means soul discovers each other...now and then when they are travelling. But their flames get ignited when
"ONLY when together in place"
when they are together in place.
what happens to that flame when they are traveling.... why 'ONLY'
Fire always remains inside....as far I see love flames...it grows when you are together and when you are not together. It grows so badly that......
Why "Only togther"
(Dont publish it....doesnt matter its your thought)
Beautiful n sweet..lov n lust, wher u put the boundary...!
you have been tagged!! xD
as usual this one is also very nice.
@Sony - You really made me think here, I am usually not so late in replying to comments! First of all thank you so much for reading and leaving such deep views, really appreciate that! :)
In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering. As souls grow apart for reasons we know (or may not), our hearts mature and our love becomes as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable. You know, souls are like lamp, they need to be fed out of another's heart, or its flame burns low or at times, even goes off!
I am not a pessimist, but I see reality too. And I love your comments, so I wanted them here! :)
@Devil - With love and lust boundaries stop existing! Thanks! :)
@Choco lover - Will just check! :D
@Pratibha - thanks, as usual! :)
Baba re.. I see a great poet whose words are going beyond my thinking.. :P:P
Loved the center portion more.. :)
Hmmmmm.....I JUST LOVED IT
And that vocab! Really awesome and sweet of course..:)
Beautiful poem...
Awesome title..:)
beautifully written. it touched a chord.
great work
I am toooooooooo dumb for this one..
I completely understand the title but not the poem.
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